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Wednesday, September 19, 2018

Thoughts on the Captain Marvel Trailer


 Just Saw the Captain Marvel Trailer. And from what I saw I can honestly say this is going to be Marvel Studios first major flop.


From the trailer Captain Marvel doesn’t feel like a Marvel Studios movie. It looks and feels like a bland and generic. Like a CW Show. That’s not what you want in a movie with a $100 million plus budget. Wonder Woman this ain’t.


Basically Captain Marvel is gonna be Marvel’s version of CW’s Supergirl. And I don’t mean fun Season 1 Supergirl. It’s gonna be feminist Season 3 SJW Supergirl, the one with no personality, no soul and no heart. The one who spends all her time preaching to the audience and complaining about her life.  


Captain Marvel’s story looks like the usual one Hollywood trots out when they write their so-called “Strong” heroines. Woman crashes out of the sky, doesn’t know who she is and spends most of the movie trying to figure out her past while she prepares to take on whatever big menace she has to confront in the third act.


Very disappointing when you consider that Captain Marvel has been hyped up to be the planet moving super badass who is supposed to be helping the Avengers take on Thanos. The character presented in this trailer doesn’t do anything to make the viewer believe that she’s someone who can be a cosmic level hero or even a threat capable of challenging Thanos in Avengers 4.


Then there’s Brie Larson. From what I saw onscreen Brie Larson has the personality of a block of wood. And I don’t mean natural wood. I mean the pressed sawdust wood you get in IKEA furniture. Yeah, Larson has an Oscar, but in the role of Carol Danvers/Captain Marvel She has no screen presence, no personality and no “voice” that makes you believe she’s a superhero. She doesn’t radiate any of the confidence and charisma that Robert Downey Jr. does when he portrays Iron Man or Chris Evans does when he plays Captain America. She has no energy that engages the audience. Watching Brie Larson is like watching a CORPSE onscreen.


Maybe she’d do better playing Janey Belle in a Zombie Tramp Movie. But I doubt Dan Mendoza would want to have someone as TERRIBLE as Larson playing his villainess.


The big problem with Captain Marvel’s trailer is that it just makes you feel indifferent. Unlike Captain America: Civil War or previous MCU movies like Iron Man that got you excited with all the badass action sequences, Captain Marvel doesn’t have a single scene in its trailer that makes you say I WANT TO SEE THIS. After I got through watching this trailer, I was feeling…MEH.


And MEH is not a feeling a movie studio wants viewers, especially longtime comic fans to have about the superhero movie leading up to what’s supposed to be the Grand Finale to the MCU, Avengers 4.


The way things look right now from that trailer Captain Marvel is to the MCU what the Force Awakens was to Star Wars. And I’m hoping Avengers 4 isn’t Marvel’s Last Jedi. With the rumors of alternate realities and time travel, I have to wonder if Captain Marvel is just a precursor to a film that could be Disney’s biggest failure since The Black Cauldron.



It’s clear to me from what I saw in the Captain Marvel trailer that the wheels are falling off the MCU bus. And if these frames are the best parts of Captain Marvel, then Marvel Studios first film with a female lead could possibly be its last.    

Monday, September 17, 2018

Chelsea Cain Takes 2 years to write 4 Comic Book Scripts- WTF?

Saturday, September 15, 2018

Shawn ROASTS Netflix’s Iron Fist Season 2

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When I saw Danny Rand on Luke Cage Season 2 it looked like the character was going to make a change for the better. Danny was acting masculine, and counseling Luke just like he did in the old Power Man & Iron Fist Comics. And after seeing Luke and Danny play “patty cake” I was anticipating what would happen in the upcoming Iron Fist Season 2.


I should have known better than to get my hopes up. Pick the worst Arrow Season 3, or 4 episode And it’s better than ANYTHING in Iron Fist Season 2.


After the impressive opening sequence of the first episode of Iron Fist where Danny knocks the engine block out of a truck’s front end Iron Fist Season 2 starts tuning into a bigger shit show than season 1. Yeah, the fight scenes have improved but the writing on this show turns into 100% pure SJW feminist propaganda. Over the course of ten episodes I got completely disgusted watching Danny Rand gets completely CUCKED and made into EVERYONE’S BITCH.


Seriously, I haven’t seen a guy get emasculated this badly since Alice Walker’s the Color Purple and the dark skinned brothers in Tyler Perry movies.


The story for Iron Fist Season 2 is supposed to be about Joy Meachum helping Davos, the Steel Serpent on his quest to take the Iron Fist from Danny Rand. Unfortunately, that story gets lost in all the gynocentrism and feminism that are shoved down our throats. We get so much GIRL POWER pushed on us that Iron Fist becomes a background character in his own show.


Almost every episode is about the SKRONG women like Colleen Wing, Misty Knight, Joy Meachum, and Typhoid Mary. They get all the story and character development while the principal hero Danny and his nemesis Davos are just afterthoughts.


And that’s what completely FUCKS UP this show. The title of the show is IRON FIST. Danny Rand should be FRONT AND CENTER in HIS OWN DAMN SHOW. The show should have been about Danny Rand keeping his promise to Matt Murdock to be the guardian of New York City and learning about crime below 96th Street.


But instead of taking on a MAN sized Responsibility Matt gave him, Danny Rand BITCHES UP. And as he BITCHES UP by doing things like punching doors in an abandoned subway tunnel we see MEN cucked and completely EMASCULATED throughout the season.  


Thanks to all the gynocentrism, we don’t get ten episodes that building into an intense martial arts throwdown between two of the greatest male martial artists in the MCU. Instead we get a jumbled mess of poorly written storylines regarding Golden Tigers, Hatchets, Tong wars that don’t really build into anything significant except showing us how Danny Rand is a BITCH.


Dude trains hard for over 20 years in the Martial arts, EARNS the Iron Fist, loses it to another Beta Male, who gets a WOMAN to fight his battle for him, then goes out and gets his girlfriend to take the Iron Fist because he can’t handle the responsibility. Then after he gives his power to a WOMAN he goes to “Find” himself.


Fuck kind of bullshit is this?


What really pisses me off about Iron Fist Season 2 is how Bitch-Made™ the men in this show act. Instead of being a leader who makes his own path in a new urban jungle as he kicks ass, Danny Rand turns into a complete Beta Male following the lead of Colleen Wing. And instead of showing the world why he’s the world’s greatest martial artist worthy of the Iron Fist he just becomes a completely submissive docile WIMP no MAN can RESPECT.


And Davos, a complete BADASS in the comics who is supposed to be BIGGER and STRONGER than Danny Rand, has been turned small effeminate looking guy who looks like he spends more time on an Incel message board than in a gym.


I just can’t believe either of these two guys are master martial artists raised in a community of MEN. The martial arts require a man to learn discipline, patience and self-control. But Neither Danny Rand nor Davos express any of those character traits based on the submissive and emotional ways they act.


If anything both Danny Rand and Davos act more like Women while Colleen Wing acts like she has a ten inch dick swinging between her legs.


Damn. Just Damn.


I had to wonder if Collen Wing’s real name was Mary Sue. Because Colleen Wing could practically DO EVERYTHING this season. From coming up with the solution for the Gang War, beating down 5 to 6 guys in martial arts fights, outfighting Danny Rand as she helped retrain him after Davos broke his leg, and wielding the Iron Fist, Colleen Wing’s arc in this dreadful season was completely RIDICULOUS. 


Everything Colleen Wing was doing Danny Rand SHOULD have been doing. But because the producers wanted GIRL POWER this season and wanted to show STRONG WOMEN Danny Rand’s balls were put in Colleen Wing’s purse.


As a writer of strong heroines, It just pissed me off that the men had to be made weak so the women could appear strong. A good writer could easily find a way to bring balance to the storytelling to show how the strengths and weaknesses of men and women complimented each other, but because the producers of this show were all about pushing a feminist narrative in a man’s show they emasculate Danny Rand over the course of ten episodes.  


One of the most mind-boggling moments in Iron Fist is an episode where Colleen Wing tells Danny to get in control of his emotions and think before he acts. Think about that.


A WOMAN TELLING A MAN TO BE IN CONTROL OF HIS EMOTIONS? AND TO THINK BEFORE HE ACTS?  WHAT KIND OF ILLOGICAL BULLSHIT IS THIS?

*Deep Breaths. Trying to remain calm here as I try to write this review of this horseshit show.*

Women are emotional by nature. So Colleen Wing trying to teach Danny Rand to be in control of his emotions and think before he acts is some BULLSHIT.


Seriously, the producers and the writers need to get over their emotional attachment for Colleen Wing. Yeah, I get you like her. But the show is called IRON FIST. It’s supposed to be about DANNY RAND. And if you can’t write GOOD DANNY RAND stories then CANCEL THE SHOW and make DAUGHTERS OF THE MARY SUES YOU ORIGINALLY WANTED TO MAKE.


*Because it wouldn’t be like any interpretation of Daughters of the Dragon I ever read in the comics.*


It just pissed me off watching Colleen Wing turned into a saint worthy of the worst fanfiction. And watching Colleen Wing and Misty Knight and Mary beat down men twice their size. Because it’s BULLSHIT. Men have EIGHT TIMES the UPPER BODY strength of a woman. No matter how much martial arts or fighting skill a woman has ONE HIT from the weakest MAN and a woman would get KNOCKED THE FUCK OUT.


As I suffered through the back five of Iron Fist I just shook my head as I watched feminists toss logic out the window. Davos hits men with the Iron Fist and they die from suffer shattered spines destroyed internal organs and caved in skulls. but Joy Meachum gets hit with the same Iron Fist, just falls several dozen feet and just breaks a leg.


Because Girl power.


FUCK YOU MARVEL STUDIOS FUCK YOU.


It’s clear to me that the SJW Cancer that infected Spider-Man: Homecoming and most Marvel Comics published over the last two years is starting to creep into the Netflix shows. Instead of giving us an action packed martial arts show featuring the world’s greatest martial artist we get feminist propaganda that kicks every male comic fan in the nuts. 


Iron Fist Season 2 is a complete shit show you need to avoid. The show walked away from the source material and is all about promoting the identity politics. When a show emasculates its hero it has jumped the shark. Just when I thought Arrow Season 6 was the pinnacle of TERRIBLE, Iron Fist does it one better.

Friday, September 7, 2018

It’s my Birthday AND I’m GIVING AWAY FREE eBOOKS!

My Birthday is this Sunday! And to celebrate I’m offering three of my eBooks for FREE to readers on Kindle this weekend!

Those eBooks include:





Pick yourself up a FREE eBook on Saturday and my birthday! It’s my gift to you!

Monday, September 3, 2018

E'steem: No Good Deed Comic Script Second Draft

  

I spent part of Sunday night revising the E’steem: No Good Deed Comic script. While the first draft got ideas on paper, it wouldn’t translate well into pictures. 

Working with comic artists like Bill Walko and Mike Williams designing book covers for Isis, E’steem, and John Haynes series books I’m starting to get the hang of comic writing. And as I design those covers I’m starting to really understand how to get my pictures to tell a story.  

Comics are a visual medium. And every picture on the page has to move the story forward. With this revision I think the pictures tell a much clearer story than the first draft I did a few years ago. I think if an artist had to work with this version of the script they could see how to place the panels towards telling the story and how to move the action. Comic writing is VERY different than novel or screenwriting and I’m starting to figure out the quirks.

This script still needs a lot of work, but I’m learning a lot from reading comic scripts. I’m hoping to get to the point where I can develop a couple of Isis series books into full comic scripts for an Isis graphic novel. I’d love to raise funds through patreon and indiegogo for one soon. But before I can do that I have to make sure any script I write is on point.    

E’steem: NO GOOD DEED
By Shawn James
Copyright © 2013,  2018 Shawn James



PAGE ONE
SPLASH

The close space of a fitting room inside one of Madison Avenue’s designer boutiques. E’steem, a sexy sista with a fit, hourglass figure wearing a red lace bra and matching bikini panties stands and stares at her reflection in the full-length mirror. Her red wrap dress and designer heels lie on the fitting room bench in the background. There’s an annoyed look on her face as she ponders-

E’steem: (thought bubble) How long does it take to find a dress?


Title: NO GOOD DEED



PAGE TWO

PANEL ONE
E’steem grimaces as she looks at her watch.
E’steem: (thought bubble) The saleswoman said she’d be right back. It’s been five minutes and she still hasn’t returned with the size four she said was just supposed to be just on the rack-

PANEL TWO:
¾ ESTABLISHING SHOT
The sales floor of a Madison Avenue designer boutique. Slow day. One of the salesladies is working the counter and another is fishing through dresses for E’steem’s size on a rack when A pair of obese hood rats with brightly colored hair weaves, tight jeans, tight T-shirts and gaudy multicolored sneakers kick the door in. One holds a nine, another holds a shotgun. 
SFX (Door) BAM!
SFX (Shotgun pointed at ceiling) BOOM!
HOODRAT#1: EVERYBODY GET YOUR HANDS UP! THIS IS A STICK UP!

PANEL THREE
One woman points her pistol at the sales clerk at the register the other aims her shotgun at the ceiling and lets off a round.
HOODRAT #2: GIMME ALL THE MONEY IN THE REGISTER NOW!

PANEL FOUR
In the fitting room E’steem cocks an ear after hearing gunshot.
E’steem: (thought bubble) Great. Out of all the stores on Madison Avenue they had to rob it had to be one I was shopping in.


PAGE THREE
PANEL ONE
ESTABLISHING SHOT
Outside on the sales floor. One hoodrat has her pistol trained on the salesclerks at the counter while she’s stuffing money from the register in a bag. While the other points her shotgun is walking towards the area with a sign above that says FITTING ROOMS.
Hoodrat#1: Is there anybody else in the store?
Saleslady: N-No…
Hoodrat #2 with shotgun: I’ma go check the back.

PANEL TWO
E’steem is peering down at her iPhone as-
E’steem (Thought bubble) Better cloak out. I’m not in the mood to be a hostage today.

PANEL THREE
ESTABLISHING SHOT
The Hoodrat rushes down the hall-

PANEL FOUR
And kicks in the door of the stall of the fitting room. There’s a gradient effect while E’steem starts to fade from sight.
SFX (door kicked in) BOOM!
HOODRAT #1 (Off panel) ANYBODY BACK THERE?

PANEL FIVE
CLOSE UP
Hoodrat looks around the fitting room
Hoodrat: Ain’t nobody in here!

PANEL SIX
A nervous Saleswoman on the sales floor with a gun on her.
Saleswoman: There has to be someone in there! She was our only customer!

PANEL SEVEN
E’steem stands in the corner of the stall in her underwear with a frown on her face.
E’steem: (thought bubble) There’s some customer service for you. Rat out the only person who isn’t a hostage.


PAGE FOUR
PANEL ONE
The hoodrat with the shotgun peers down at E’steem’s red wrap dress and heels unaware of the invisible E’steem in the background.
Hoodrat: WELL SHE MUSTA LEFT! AIN’T NOTHING IN HERE BUT CLOTHES!

PANEL TWO
As the hoodrat bolts out of the fitting room with her shotgun, E’steem becomes visible again.

PANEL THREE
CLOSE UP
E’steem wickedly smiles as peers down at her iPhone thinking-
E’steem (Thought bubble): I could call the police to bust up this little robbery. Or I could take the law into my own hands…

PANEL FOUR
E’steem gestures like she’s casting a spell.
E’steem: RAIMENTUS CHANGEUS!

PANEL FIVE
A flash of light envelops her silhouette and…
SFX: FZASH!
Caption: A spell is chanted. And in the place of the attractive shopper stands-


PAGE FIVE
SPLASH PAGE

Caption: E’steem, The Devilish Diva! Once one of the most feared she-demons in All Hell, She now fights on the side of the Angels.

E’steem, stands posed in front of the mirror The sultry she-demon has long black horns jutting out of the top of her head, yellow reptile eyes, black cloven finger and toe claws. She wears a tattered red dress and a smile on her face.

E’steem: Time to scare some kids straight.



PAGE SIX

PANEL ONE
ESTABLSHING SHOT
One of the smiling Hoodrats is snatching a bag of money from the saleswoman behind the counter. As they head for the door-
HOODRAT: Nice doing business with you.

PANEL TWO
The scared hoodrats are stopped by when A flash of light in the form of a female silhouette.
SFX FZASH!

PANEL THREE
E’steem stands in front of the door arms akimbo with a smile on her face. A flash of light behind her to signify her teleporting.
E’steem: Excuse me, I’m with loss prevention. Can I see your receipt for that cash in your bag?
Hoodrat#2: OH MY GOD! IT’S A MONSTER!

PANEL FOUR
CLOSE UP
E’steem smirks E’steem: (thought bubble) Demon I’m a demon. Don’t they ever see the horns?

PANEL FIVE
One of the terrified Hoodrats aims her pistol at E’steem.
Hoodrat #1 SHOOT IT! SHOOT IT!

PANEL SIX
Bullets bounce off E’steem’s large breasts. E’steem smiles and reaches for her gun and-
E’steem: Just like a human kill what you don’t understand.



PAGE SEVEN
PANEL ONE
And snatches it away. The women’s eyes are wide as-

PANEL TWO
Closeup on E’steem’s black clawed hands. She crumples the gun like paper.
SFX: CRUMP!

Panel THREE
E’steem smiles as she tosses the crumpled gun over her shoulder and looks at the terrified Hoodrat asking-
E’steem: Do you want to give up now?

PANEL FOUR
Hoodrat#1 swings at E’steem as her flight or fight response kicks in. E’steem dodges the blow.
Hoodrat #1 : You’re not gonna take me to Hell! 

PANEL FIVE
The scared hoodrat catches a backhand slap from an indifferent E’steem that sends her to the floor.
SFX: SMACK!

PANEL SIX
E’steem peers down at the fallen hoodrat smirks, and tells her-
E’steem: Hell? I was going to let the police take you to jail.



PAGE EIGHT

PANEL ONE
Saleswomen react to the action. They’re gasped in awe of E’steem’s feat of strength.
Saleswoman #1 Did you see that? She knocked her out with a slap to the face!

PANEL TWO
A smiling E’steem looks over at the hoodrat with the shotgun and asks-
E’steem: Now are you going to atone for your sins? Or am I going to have to smite you?

PANEL THREE
SFX KACHICK!
Nervous, the Hoodrat #2 cocks her shotgun in defiance and points it at the heads of one of the saleswomen. E’steem’s body is frozen in an aggressive stance.
Hoodrat #2: Don’t come near me! She barks. “I’ll blow their heads off!

PANEL FOUR
A tense stand off as E’steem looks across the room, smiles at the girl and tells her-
E’steem: I’m not moving.

PANEL FIVE
Closeup on the Hoodrats’ multicolored weave starting to smolder.

PANEL SIX
Smoke turns to fire. The Hoodrat’s eyes grow wide as she smells-



PAGE NINE
PANEL ONE
Flames full on the hoodrats head. She drops her shotgun and is flailing around like a chicken with its head cut off. Saleslady in the background picks up the shotgun
SFX: FWASH!
Hoodrat: “AAAAHHHHH!!!! MY WEAVE!”

PANEL TWO
…And the hoodrat has wide eyes when she’s staring down the barrel of her shotgun. Her hands are on the back of her head trying to put out the fire.

Saleslady: ALRIGHT! ON YOUR KNEES AND PUT YOUR HANDS BEHIND YOUR HEAD!
Hoodrat: But-but my hair is on fire!
Saleslady ON YOUR KNEES!

PANEL THREE
Hoodrat has tears in her eyes as she’s on her knees. E’steem takes a bottle of water off the counter and pours water on the girl’s weave to put out the fire and laughs.
E’steem: Big cryaby.

PANEL FOUR
Women smile expressing their gratitude to E’steem.
Saleslady: Thank you so much for saving our lives Miss.
E’steem Why you’re welcome. I couldn’t have crooks robbing my favorite store.

PANEL FIVE
Salesladies express their gratitude to E’steem. E’steem smiles pondering what she’ll buy with her discount.
Saleslady#2 Well, the next time you come in, we’ll make sure to give you our employee discount on anything in the store.”
E’steem (thought bubble): That reward would sure help me in buying that little black dress I was trying on a few minutes ago.
E’steem Er…Don’t you have a customer in the back?”
Saleslady #1 I forgot all about her!”



PAGE TEN
PANEL ONE
A flash of light shows E’steem teleporting as one of the Salesladies rushes off the salesfloor.

PANEL TWO
E’steem reappears in the fitting room in her underwear. A flash of light behind her to signify her teleporting.

PANEL THREE
Saleswoman outside the door.
Saleswoman: MISS? MISS ARE YOU ALL RIGHT?
SFX: Rapp! Rapp!

PANEL FOUR
E’steem stands in the doorway of the fitting room next to the one she’s in in her red wrap dress and heels with a nervous smile on her face.
E’steem: I’m fine.

PANEL FIVE
A nervous saleslady looks over at E’steem-
Saleslady: I thought she’d gotten to you-
E’steem: She would’ve, but when I heard the gunshot, I grabbed my cell phone, ran into another fitting room and called 911.
Saleswoman: Just be glad you stayed in here. You didn’t have to see the demon!

PANEL SIX
E’steem gives the saleslady a curious look.
E’steem: Demon?”


PAGE ELEVEN
PANEL ONE
E’steem has an engaged look on her face as she listens to the story.
Yes, a tall Black woman in a raggedy red dress with yellow snake eyes, horns, and black claws.
E’steem: Wow. She sounds scary.

PANEL TWO
An excited saleslady tells her story to E’steem.
Saleslady I’d say she was. She bent steel like it was paper, and set the other one’s hair on fire.
E’steem: I doubt they’ll ever pull another stick-up again.
Saleslady: She sure scared them straight.

PANEL THREE
There’s an eager look on E’steem’s face as she anticipates her reward.
E’steem: So do you have the size four in the little black dress?

PANEL FOUR
There’s a befuddled one on the saleslady’s face.
Saleslady Oh…I was coming back here to tell you that we’re all out of your size. I’m sorry.

PANEL FIVE
Shrugged shoulders and a playful smile on E’steem’s face as she looks to the readers and tells them-
E’steem: {Thought bubble} I save the day and I still don’t get the dress I wanted to buy. I guess no good deed goes unpunished.

Friday, August 31, 2018

E’steem: Goddess of? Cover Concept Art




Spent the last two days working on cover concept art for E’steem Goddess of? And I finally got some of the images out of my imagination down on paper.


E’steem Goddess of? takes place after E’steem: Ascension and is what E’steem is doing while Isis and John are trying to Escape from Transylvania in Isis: Escape From Transylvania. In this story, Hell’s aspiring angel takes on Avarisk, The Tormentor, a demonic Dominatrix out to make E’steem submit to Lucifer and return to the Legion. And as she takes on that Demonic Dominatrix we get a showcase of E’steem’s new powers and her stronger resolve. 

The scene for this cover is fairly simple. E’steem is on the beach of the Island of Solitude hovering above the sand with an intense look on her face and her hands glowing with her new light powers. Avarisk is rearing her whip back ready to strike to take her down.



E’steem’s look for this one is simple, just her powered up in a red bikini. The reason why I haven’t drawn a bikini top is I’m on the fence about having her topless. In Goddess of?, E’steem loses her Chanel bikini top in the fight with Avarisk, The Tormentor, and she’s topless in this fight sequence. While wardrobe malfunctions are par for the course with E’steem in her battles, but I don’t know how readers would feel about seeing a topless woman on the cover. I might draw her hair over her breasts as a compromise .







Avarisk, The Tormentor’s look in contrast to E’steem’s is intricate. Her outfit is black leather dominatrix gear with lots of laces. I was gonna keep it simple, but I felt the laces added texture to her outfit and drew our eyes to her face where we’d see the plume of blonde hair, blue eyes and red lips along with that badass spiked collar.  Avarisk is a demoness you don’t want to mess with she can kill a gnat with a crack of her whip!

I’m hoping to have E’steem: Goddess of? Available in Spring of 2019. The book is edited and uploaded to Amazon and ready for sale. All I’m doing right now is just trying to get the cover concept art ready for the artist.